Rough Cut 2

Feedback

• 'Nice establishing shot but it is quite slow

• Change the font of the titles – it Is not good

• You need institutional logos at the start

• Look at the placement of the film title – it is right on top and the shot where he walks across the screen with the lamppost in it is too long

• Some of your shots are much better

• Consider placement of other titles too – some of them are over the action

• Consider sound track

• The shot after he has thrown the leaflet away and the shot on the bridge is too far shot over to the right – it looks odd as he has just been in the centre of the frame

• As an opening title sequence it runs well

• Narrative is difficult to follow'

 - Miss Peacock and Mr Bluck -

 

Comparing this to our first rough cut, there is a clear distinction in quality, in regards to our uses of camera and narrative style. It's clear we took more care with conveying our opening in a more gradually enigmatic and artist way, with more varied shot types that reflect the main protagonist's current state of mind. That being said, as seen in our teacher's comments, there are still certain elements we need to capitalise on for our next cut if we want to get as many marks as possible. Luckily, because none of us in the group were in the opening sequence we won't have to go back and film again, which means the filming aspect of this task is now complete. This means we will be focusing our time on post-production elements within the film making process. For example, adding non-diegetic music will help to better establish a mood and tone, while a different font type will also aid in defining our genre. We will fully utilise this feedback we've been given and do our best to incorporate all of these elements into our next cut.