Rough Cut 1

This is the first edited version of our 'Remorse' film opening. After having given this cut to our teachers we soon received a list of improvements and they are as follows:

'You have a few nice shots but on the whole there is lots to improve on in order to bring your piece up into the higher levels:

 

• You need an institutional logo - at least one at the start
• You need at least another 30 seconds of footage
• The notebook on the bench is not great
• Your titles are not in the correct order - look at your research for this
• The voice over is not good - there are gaps in it - will you add in non diegetic music?
• The Film Title font and lavishness is bad - does not fit in with the genre
• Some of the shots are out of focus and need to be filmed again
• The narrative doesn't make sense - does he love him? who is it? I thought it was meant to be a gangster film - it feels like a love story at the moment.
• As Ryan is in it, he cannot get any marks for use of camera at the moment.
• For rough cut two you need to focus on the narrative and what you are actually trying to produce because it is all a little confusing at the moment.'

 

We have taken this criticism on board and will improve on these particular areas for our next cut.